The story I am about to tell you is one of magic and of monsters, of bravery and courage, of good and of evil, but most importantly of Flame and he who wished to quench it - Old Cro, the story teller.
Full Item Description
Flame, or Melethel, sometimes called Everburn, is a hand-and-a-half sword with a forty-two inch blade made from red steel, and a seven inch steel handle, wrapped in cured bullhide, with arcane runes etched into the three inch crosspiece.
Thrond, king of the land called Thanethia, needed a powerful weapon to defeat his ageless foe, Tok’lar. Thus, he had a blade forged in the fires of Gulth-Bem (now called Worm Pit), because of this, the sword forever had the power of flame. When the time came to test the weapon, it did, indeed prove able, and he defeatedTok'lar. Unfortunately, when Thrond died, the sword was lost in a forest, hence named Flame Wood, and has been forgotten by most peoples.
Flame has been well named since it will burn anyone that the blade touches other than the current wielder, the runes on the hilt will burn into the forearm of whoever draws it the for the first time after the previous owner has died. This is done to mark all former owners.
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A fairly average flaming sword, the decription, however, is precise and good, and while it is short it shows definite improvement. I like some of your names, Col. Drackler
Backstory is something of a cliché (king wants a magic sword so it gets made then lost when he dies)
Item is just a YAKAW (Yet Another Kick Ass Weapon)
So 1 for the item + 1 for the backstory total 2/5
Not bad Colonel. Like Scras, I also like the names you used. And your stuff is improving! Hope to see it get better and better (more details and story Drackler)
howda ya' like that! I give you a nickname, and people think your an actual Colonel now :D
Update: Capitalization. Flow. Overall goody-ness.
Or YAMW, for Yet Another Magic Weapon.
Truth be told, while I understand that system specifics are out, the sword "burns anyone it touches" how? +1-ish flame damage? Double damage to water- or ice-based creatures? Do things it hits go up in a ball of fire, or are they just seared in some way? (Heck, how do you scabbard it?)
The backstory doesn't quite square, either. If the weapon was promptly lost after its sole owner's death, what former owners? How did it get so many names? If the weapon was lost upon the king's death, wouldn't the king's body itself be there, and perhaps guards or retinue as well?
Solid, IMHO. I suppose it could be considered YAMW.
I can think of lots of reasons why the sword was lost and not recovered. Maybe the King was murdered, and the assassin took the blade. Or there was a nasty forest fire and they were all wiped out. The party was poisoned. The party caught the pox.
So all in all, pretty solid. Thanks