[DELETED] Glast Heim

1. [DELETED] Glast Heim

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   Glast Heim | Ruins | Other | A cursed place were lonely souls stays | Author: Alia Clerya G. Sukory [ Print setting ] [ Edit Post ]
   
   A Destroyed Castle Invaded by the evil!
   Yet the souls inside it still search for freedom.
   
   
   STORY
   It was first a beautiful kingdom But Destroyed by the Evil and many souls lurking inside the rooms of the castle.
   
   King Savanon Heim owns this castle when it's still alive, he is a kind of man who would do anything just to protect his kindom. and when the time Humans, Demons, Gods and Titans starts a war for some reason but the humans isn't aware of this. The demons first targeted the humans, one by one, little by little the demons destroyed all the cities, but the castle is well protected by wind barriers that have been summoned by their wizards and mages, and some people that have been evacuated from the cities that have been destroyed. 3 months later the cities of volsug starts growing again but yet their stillunder a seal that the demons created they can only be freed by destroying the master of all demons called Surt. And the humans start to telling the king to fight for freedom but the king don't want to lose his people anymore, but there's nothing else he can do so he agreed. But Surt heared about the people of volsug preparing to attack and he destroyed the cities before they attack. Now the souls of the dead remains because of the seal. And yet the souls still searches for freedom. And now the castle is called Glast Heim.
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   EchoMirage Submitted: 10.11.04 09:48 [ EDIT ]
   
   Aaaaaaaaah!
   Ehm....
   Aaaaaah?
   Aaaaaaaah!
   Jak_O_Lantern_King Submitted: 10.11.04 13:14 [ EDIT ]
   
   I could say the same thing for this as I did for your item kid, but uhh, this is a perversion of everything of all things that role playing stands for. This is below exceptable, but might I suggest that before you go off bitching and ranting about how we are assholes, look at some of the other posts on this website even most the 1.00's are better than this. Keep trying and I hope to see some improvement
   Scrasamax Submitted: 10.11.04 14:48 [ EDIT ]
   
   It looks like we are going to need a young priest, an old priest, and some holy water.
   
   0/5
   CaptainPenguin Submitted: 10.11.04 20:16 [ EDIT ]
   
   Please ignore Jak-O-Lantern-King. He seems to be over-reacting.
   
   But really- what is there that is special about this place? Why is it called Glass Heim? What is the evil that destroyed it? What was it like? Why did the evil destroy it? Why do the ghosts haunt it?
   Details, details.
   
   0/5.
   Maggot Submitted: 10.11.04 22:11 [ EDIT ]
   
   I have this feeling that Grecio is just posting crap like this crap to make us mad.
   CaptainPenguin Submitted: 10.12.04 18:18 [ EDIT ]
   
   Now now, Maggot.
   Jak_O_Lantern_King Submitted: 10.13.04 10:59 [ EDIT ]
   
   Your right Captain, And I do feel like I owe an appology, I did over react, *humble bow* as such I have removed my previous post as it truely was unacceptable. Thanks again for being a lone voice of reason Capt.
   CaptainPenguin Submitted: 10.13.04 18:21 [ EDIT ]
   
   Actually, I'm not usually the voice of reason. Most of the time, that's MoonHunter.
   Jak_O_Lantern_King Submitted: 10.13.04 18:54 [ EDIT ]
   
   true true oh so true, but again we all have our moments :)
   MoonHunter Submitted: 10.14.04 10:00 [ EDIT ]
   
   Can I suggest a couple of things about your posts (especially item, place, and character posts).
   
   1) Can you review the three, four, and five star posts before you post items, places, or characters again. That way you know what we are looking for.
   
   2) I need you to invest a little more time in your posts. Your items, places, and characters look "dashed off". It looks like you spend less three minutes on them. Most of us spend twnety to thirty minutes to do a post AND we spend a some time working on the posts/ thinking about the posts for a few days before we post.
   
   "Dashed off" posts show to members that you don't care about your posts and you do not care about the people reading them.
   
   3) Write your posts in your native language and utilize a site like www.altavista.com to translate it. You can then use your English skills to "clean up" what the translation program produced. If English is your native language, please let us know and we can give you some links on fiction writing.
   
   4) Many of the people have given useful advice, about adding details and answering all the "questions" that are brought up by your post. Details are not hard, they just take a little bit more effort. Take your time and do it right and everything will go well. See the "dashed off" comment on #2.
   Ancient Gamer Submitted: 05.25.05 13:30 [ EDIT ]
   
   Will this be improved Alia? Please do so :)

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