[deleted] Alia

1. [deleted] Alia

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   Alia | Human | Mage | Crusader | Female | Author: greccio500 [ Print NPC ] [ Edit Post ]
   
   She's good at near battle's but have many weaknesses!
   
   
   
   Equipment
   Glaive of berserker, Fullplate of the cross, Solar god helm, Sheild of mimic.
   
   Appearance
   She have a long blue hair, a beautiful face, she's dressed with a heavy armor and she always were a skirt and she is cute and kind and lovable and sexy.
   
   Background
   When she was still young she's been always teased by other kids but using her mind. she became morethan she wished.
   
   Age=15
   
   
   Notes
   Spells:
   Heal
   Cure
   Devine Cross
   sheild boomerang
   
   | | Hits 28 | Added 10.10.04 10:41 | Votes 5 Rating 1.80
   

   
   
   

   MoonHunter Submitted: 10.10.04 11:40
   
   Sigh. Could you please read some of the example characters and see what passes for a 3 or better star character before you post again.
   
   To be helpful...
   1) Explain the items... what they look like and what they do?
   2) How can someone wear skirts/ dress and platemail?
   3) How and why did this character become more than she wished?
   
   Keep to the gold standard... If the character does not have the depth you would expect of a character in a fantasy book, then it is not worth posting.
   
   CaptainPenguin Submitted: 10.10.04 12:57
   
   What are the items? What is here background? What is a Crusader exactly? What is a "morethan"? She's a 15 year old knight?
   Details-details-details.
   
   1/5.
   CaptainPenguin Submitted: 10.10.04 12:58
   
   Interesting...
   There was only one vote before mine, and it was a 5.
   Been rating your own, Greccio?
   Anonymous Submitted: 10.10.04 13:54
   
   Read some of Ephemeralstability's items/characters/plots... Or the Captn's, or MoonHunters, or Iain or... well, read some because it always helps to have a reference.
   
   And good luck with your Game mastering, may it give you many, many fine evenings!
   
   ~Ancient Gamer
   greccio500 Submitted: 10.11.04 08:24
   
   Sorry I'm just new here!
   sorry if I have many mistakes I can make it right again!
   
   I'm not good in putting Details!
   
   and I need help how to... to... Do things here!
   AND PLEASE BE CAREFUL WHAT YOUR SAYING!
   
   EchoMirage Submitted: 10.11.04 09:44
   
   Well, you should be first careful about what you're posting, my dear. And don't shout. It's bad etiquette.
   MoonHunter said all the nice things that could be said, so listen to some things not so nice:
   First, many, too many of the users to name, have a different mother language than English, and imagine, they manage a good post without grammar and spelling unworthy of a piece of orc crap.
   It does not excuse you from posting bu[[$h!+, to be honest. I mean, don't just cry *bombs away!* and post like mad, better work on a single post, and use a spelling checker... there aren't many computers without MS Word out there, so you've got no excuse coming here.
   You know, we come here to share ideas WORTH SHARING. Some of us at least.
   Cheka Man Submitted: 10.11.04 13:40
   
   I only voted to try and get the rating down to 1/5, which is 1 point more then this deserves-it deserves 0/5
   Pirate Penguin Submitted: 10.12.04 18:38
   
   Come on your being to harsh, I mean Grec used the word "sexy"
   
   0/5
   

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