[deleted] Glaive of berserker

1. [deleted] Glaive of berserker

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   Glaive of berserker | Type: Spear-Polearm | A spear that is strong as nature! | Cursed | Author: greccio500 [ Print Item ] [ Edit Post ]
   
   It's made of iron and it's strenght is higher than usual it's just a normal spear but it usually used in wars at can be forged and cannot be broken easily and it can have accesories added to it it's not like other spears.
   
   
   italicHeavy, flaming, freezing, shokingitalic, spear made of magical items!
   
   Magical Properties: This item is cursed.
   it can curse enemy by just hitting your enemy!
   and it can hasten the users speed but it only chooses its master!

   
   
   

   Jak_O_Lantern_King Submitted: 10.10.04 12:20
   
   ummm.... what's not to say, and I don't mean to sound harsh, but no background, poor grammar, it's not cursed, all around general lameness, except for the customizable accesories this is kindergarten quality mi amigo.
   CaptainPenguin Submitted: 10.10.04 12:53
   
   *shakes his head*
   
   1/5.
   Scrasamax Submitted: 10.10.04 19:59
   
   No backstory...it also has a gimp name. The powers are unexplained, just how does it curse with a strike, and just how does it choose its master?
   
   0/5
   greccio500 Submitted: 10.11.04 08:36
   
   Sorry I'm not good in English!
   EchoMirage Submitted: 10.11.04 09:35
   
   Well, if English was the Force, you'd be a Gamorrean I guess.
   Even if it was in CRAPPY English, yet did not have an idea my cat could come up with, it'd earn a better rating than the one I will give - litte surprise, a 1.
   
   edit: we've all got spelling checkers, don't we? Anyway, my cat came up with the idea of "the Ideal Wizard's Cat" ... anytime its owner is trying to read something and is tired, it will appear, and sit right there, across the book, purring loudly and being really playful, thus spoiling any attempt at continuing work. Great relax for the wizard, plus dries the ink (little wonder they are all black). It can also make large heaps of unnecessary potted plants and all sorts of food vanish (cast at the level of an Archmage). Yes, and it CAN catch mice and throw up hair balls.
   
   See? My cat has IMHO better ideas
   CaptainPenguin Submitted: 10.11.04 20:02
   
   Hey, let's not be rude now, Echo.
   
   But don't think you're off the hook, Greccio-
   The thing about this item is this:
   "heavy, flaming, freezing, shocking spear made of magical items"
   
   See, I can overlook the crappy introduction. But what kind of description is that? How was this weapon made? What is it's backstory? Why is it all-powerful like that? I know that English isn't your first language, and that you are still learning, but that doesn't help the fact that this item has no story. Look at some of the other items- they all have backstories. Some have bad backstories, but they still have backstories. Do you see what I mean?
   Squished Quail Submitted: 10.11.04 20:22
   
   Sounds like channel surfing past the home shopping network... "slices! Dices! Dishwasher Safe!"..... Is it microwave safe?
   Pirate Penguin Submitted: 10.12.04 18:28
   
   "Your hit with a spear"
   "Ok"
   "Your Cursed"
   "What does the curse do?"
   "It dosen't matter because your dead"
   "..."
   Pirate Penguin Submitted: 10.12.04 18:28
   
   "Your hit with a spear"
   "Ok"
   "Your Cursed"
   "What does the curse do?"
   "It dosen't matter because your dead"
   "..."
   

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